The Ailos and "Sunny" story - okay, now where?

By:Dwimordene
 June, 28 2011


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In 2009, I wrote "Beyond the Pale," about two teenaged recruits who abandoned Pelargir. One was from Harad, one from Lebennin. In 2011, for B2MEM, I tried expanding their story. Still trying to figure out how to do so successfully. Wanna help?

Comment:
Hi Nargil - Thanks for the encouragement on this story!

"I've no real points of confussion but I would like to know how they get on in Pelagrir."

Well... they survived their arrival? That's about all I have at the moment - they aren't going to end up staying there, I don't think.

This is one of the issues involved in writing the story: direction, i.e., the lack thereof. I'd sent them toward Pelargir, because it does actually make sense (especially given my version of Pelargir, in which there is a large Haradric population, composed of both native-born Gondorian Haradrim and recent immigrants). But Pelargir's Haradric population has just been traumatized by what the Corsairs did to it, that it isn't going to take in even Ailos, and Jhanar is only alive because he "belongs" to Ailos.

So they have to keep going. The question is, where do I have them stop? Where could they stop?

I have this image of them reaching the sea, but nothing beyond that. It's a very vivid image, which is usually a good sign for me, but I don't know how getting these two to the sea would advance the story, let alone end it.

"Don't worry about oc's you do them very well, look at Reparation it's almost all oc's, in fact I thing you should probably try to get Andrahar's name on the search bar he's in so many fics on here!"

Heh - yes, I looked at our collective Unabeauverse storyfile, and it is rather impressive in size, and indeed, Andrahar looms large in it. He's too much fun, since he's a window on two worlds and the space between them.

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